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I get feeling that you are working towards an anthropomorphic form here.
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Her head is fine, but the face could use some refinement.
Some definition of the nose bridge, nose, the bottom of her mouth & chin.
All looks like there missing or just comes off as just plain flat.
Her iris's are not symmetrical. The Left is fine, the right is as if the pupil has been laid upon the color of the iris itself. It's slightly oblong instead of round.
The hair comes off very rigid, because if she is that deep-set into the (pillow?) the hair would be pushed flat against her head more.
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I also see your creative hiding of your weak areas for this picture.
Shoulders, upper ribcage, where the roll of the shoulder meets neck & chest, & the arms set behind head.
Bit of a cheat, but still creative way of doing this. No shame, done it myself.
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The CM on her right is too far forward, it needs to be pulled back more.
Her bikini bottom appears to need adjustment, or to be rotated back towards center. It looks like got twisted to the right.
& is the center/crotch been pulled loose or something?
Is this a wanted appearance? If so, the top of it needs a slight bow/curve to follow the bottom of her belly.
The ties on her right need to fall to the side, they look like there sticking to her or defying gravity. The ties on the left would be hidden by her hip, unless they are really that long.
The thigh line on the her right hip cut's low too soon. Make's her mound of venus AKA, "pubic-mound" appear pudgy or large on the right side.
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I know backgrounds are not one of your strength's.
But I will offer critique any-way.
Is she laying on a beach-blanket, or a bed?
If she's on a bed:
That what appears to be the leading edge along her right, is crisp & sharp. & has no soft edging, as if she's laying on a table-top.
& the butterfly print under her arm doesn't follow the fold. It appears to float, as there is no bend along it. The print butterfly's right need's to bend downward towards along the fold of the edge.
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As per' usual your work on the ribs, waist, & hips is as always; well done.
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The whole feel of image is good, & brings warm thoughts of summer.
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Hope my critique is accepted well.
& remember if you can't get something to work the way you want. Get up, take a break. & come back with a fresh mind.
It makes things go alot smoother & saves one from pulling there hair out.
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& as always, will be looking forward to seeing more.
The swimsuit is surprisingly tiny and covers little, considering this is Fluttershy we're talking about. She doesn't seem to mind though. The overall look of her body combined with lack of breasts make it difficult to pin down how old she looks, and the noticeable lack of hands/feet or hooves begs the question of how you would have handled that.
The only real issue I have with the image is the flap at the bottom of her bikini bottom; it looks loose compared to how skintight the rest of the swimsuit is.
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